This is my first edit:
Now that I have finished my first edit I need to get some audience research, and to do this I have written a questionnaire and handed it out/ emailed to people of my target audience ( 16-25 males and females ).
This is what I have asked and some of the feed back which I have already received :
1. Do you understand the storyline and what is happening in the opening sequence?
Everyone has written YES which is a good start, along with explaining the narrative of a man killing/capturing children.
2. Could you mistake this opening sequence as a trailer? Please explain why this is.
• No as is not fast paced and doesn't end with the film title.
• No as you don't give away most of the story line and there are no fast cuts.
• No as it doesn't jump from one scene to another.
• It flows well and is easy to follow, making it more of an opening sequence.
3. What atmosphere do you think has been created, and do you think it suits the genre of Horror ?
• Really tense, especially when he's counting.
• Suspense- especially the shots of someone going up the stairs. Yes suits the genre.
•Quite a scary atmosphere, especially with the eerie singing and weird man.
4. Do you think the sound track is effective? If not, how can it be changed to improve it?
• Very haunting when sung by the small child. Maybe add an undertone of something else.
• I like the singing but you have no actual music, so this could be improved.
• Singing creates a dramatic mood and helps to build suspense.
• Creates suspense and you know something is going to happen to the children.
5. What enigma codes are raised when watching the opening sequence? ( what are you asking your self? )
• Who is the man?
• What is he doing?
• Why has he killed/captured the children?
• How could he get in?
• What have the children done wrong?
• Are the parents out?
6. Do you think the opening sequence has an appropriate pace to mirror the atmosphere? Should it be faster? Slower?
• The pace is great.
• Yes I think it has an appropriate pace, tension is built well and suspense is created.
• Yes it creates suspense and the counting helps too.
7. Do you think the positioning of the titles is effective? If so why? If not, please explain how they can be improved.
• Yes I love it when the titles appear between the counting as it creates tension.
• There are too many titles when the boy is counting. Maybe cut them down to two or three but make them longer instead.
• Yes builds tension between the counting.
• Spread out well.
8.Do you think the characters are introduced successfully, if so what have you learnt about them? If not, please explain how this can be improved.
• The brother is clearly responsible, looking after his sister.
• We know that she is a scared little girl.
• Yes they are introduced well. The girl is excitable and the brother is fed up with her but tries to keep her happy.
• Erm yes, but you don't really find out much about the girl and boy- just that they look quite innocent. The man is good because you know that he is scary.
9. Do you think it contains sufficient dialogue to help narrate the story?
• Yes. Enough that you know what's going and explains the story, but not too much so that it stays creepy.
• Enough is used. any more would make it less dramatic. although I think you could replace the man at the end saying ' I found you ' with the girl screaming.
• Yes, however I don't think the killers voice is very convincing. Maybe end with 'we all fall down' from the nursery rhyme.
10. Has the setting been established clearly enough?
• Yes you have three different shots which is plenty.
• You show the house at the beginning which is typical of the genre, and works well.
• yes you can tell that it's set in a house.
Are there any other general comments or other improvements which you think could be made?
• Very good.
• I think it's good but perhaps you could introduce the man a bit more.
So I have got some quite useful feedback from my target audience so far. A lot of the comments highlighted the same points, which is good because it shows me that those things definitely need addressing. However other areas had mixed results, for example the titles which break up the boy counting; so I need to think carefully about how to improve these areas as it seems to be down to personal preference.
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